This week I wanted to give a sample of the New Adult WIP that I am currently revising, tentatively titled, Make it Last.
This is from the first draft. Let me know what you think.
This was the moment Briana had been dreading, but now that it was there, she found that she knew just how to handle it.
“Hi, Colin,” She replied, and started to walk around him.
“Wait,” Colin exclaimed, putting his hand on her arm to stop her from walking away. “Can’t we talk?”
Briana looked pointedly at his hand and then up at his face, not saying anything until he removed it.
“We don’t have anything to talk about, Colin.” Briana said, hoping her face looked bored, because her nerves were bouncing all over the place. “Besides, I’m working.”
“Looks like you’re on break,” he replied. “C’mon, Bree, just give me a couple minutes.”
Briana was about to tell him to shove it, when she felt someone come up behind her and two strong arms wrapped around her from behind.
“Hey, Babe, I’ve been wondering if Pam was ever gonna give you a break.” Kent whispered in her ear
He said it loud enough for Colin to hear, and Briana notice him stiffen at Kent’s words and his obvious familiarity.
“Yeah, I’ve got a quick one,” Briana turned and gave him a grateful look, before going up on his tip toes to meet him for a kiss.
She thought she heard a grunt or something come from Colin, so she turned to give him a smile and an introduction.
“Oh, sorry,” she said, not the least bit sorry. “Kent, this is Colin, we went to high school together. Colin, this is Kent.”
“What’s up, man?” Kent asked, extending his hand for a shake.
Colin looked at the offered hand, then back at Kent, who may have been an inch shorter than him, and shook it.
“Not much. You must be new around here.” Colin said, knowing he’d never seen him around before. He didn’t like the way his stomach had tightened when the guy had come up behind Briana, and when he’d kissed her, he’d had to refrain from punching him in the face.
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Sunday, August 12, 2012
#SampleSunday - New Adult WIP
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Think you've got an exciting NA in the works here, Bethany. :)ReplyDelete
Really liked, " He didn’t like the way his stomach had tightened when the guy had come up behind Briana, and when he’d kissed her, he’d had to refrain from punching him in the face."
You're killing me here! I need more OMG I love it so far and I can't wait to read it. See you on Wednesday :) Ciao for now ;)